Bedroom Talk

Please can you read my short story? Rate :)?

Public Comments

1. SHORT STORY MY BUT YOU READ THAT AND REVISE IT YOURSELF
2. That is such an amazing story! The descriptions and detail in it is great! I don't read much as nothing my concentration wavers, but not with your story - very captivating! Loved the content, and the ending was really well done! It really drew me in. Well done! I'd love to read more of your stories in the future. Just amazing! :)
3. its a nice story! :) Just add more details about the 1940s (what was cool back then, describe the dress that she wors to the dance) do not overlook the little detail, otherwise the story is great!
4. that was a good storey i think but what made u right that? im going through a lot right now as well i just lost 2 best friends and the both of them died March 30,2008 and March 31,2008 so yea but its a good storey and u just need to move on as i am.